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on the train (haiku)

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newspapers rustle	1
suits bob and weave when seeing	2
hems rise, stabbing heels	3

shrinking spaces instil covert faces

17 Feb 07

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hmmmm...sounds like the "E" Train in Boston. I LOVE the last line. Potent images there! Good job.
— starr

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