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Carpenter's Hands
joshcoops

His hands are like
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the canvas to his carpentry life,
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creases and wrinkles branch
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over a calloused background,
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dirt and saw-dust blur and blend
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like an impressionism of his days work.
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At lunch, he sits on his cooler and
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paints peanut butter on bread
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with a splintered shim,
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the shelter of his work
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framed around him,
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his hammer resting by the lumber
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like a paintbrush by its easel.
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He has sheathed the walls
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that Edward Hopper slanted light to,
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leveled the window that showed
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Van Gogh a Starry Night.
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He could hang the joists beneath
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Van Eycke’s wedding floor,
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or discuss with Michelangelo
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the pitch of his ceiling,
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so when I ask him
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if he ever planned on
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painting one day,
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he looks at me
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with an enigmatic gaze
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and says, “Nah, I think I’ll sub.”
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16 Feb 07

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wellthen
quiteanicepoem
kudos
on choosing your theme and sticking with it to the end.
i know lots of framers/gencons...
i little suggesteeeonay fer ya-  
L10,11 the half-framed shelter of his work around him?
might add a little more oomph, i think?
well done
 — chuckles

good suggestion chuckles, thanks
 — joshcoops

I like this but you do need to spell Van Gogh's name properly!

I think I'll sub?  As in substitute teaching?  What am I missing here?  I like all the rest of this.
 — Isabelle5

sub refers to sub-contracting....often contractors 'sub' out work i.e. they sub the plumming out, or they sub the electric.....or they sub the painting.
 — joshcoops

Oh, thanks, I get it.  Up a notch, Poet.
 — Isabelle5

I like lines 7 and 6.

I think you are australiahn. Like me. Its the dialect, the language, the "Nah" and the "sub".

Carpentrys cool. A biblical proffesion - Are you writing of your son?

Line 14 - A personal opinion, but I hate the word "sheath" - it has a sexual connotation, reminds me of condoms

Its a great poem - You are saying that the object is good at his trade, an artist -

Good stuff.

-pollyreg
 — unknown

this is a good one, but the ending is glib
 — unknown

I love the allusions here and how you allude to skills being specific and not able to transfer to different forms of craft or art.

Larry whittling words Lark
 — larrylark

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