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Cruel Weather (Lonely Place)

dandy

i made a fire	1
and watched it die	2

the flames flickered	3
and tugged the sky	4

then the rain broke	5
and stung my face	6

now i grow cold	7
in a lonely place	8

16 Feb 07

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It's so small. It's so unpunctuated. It works so well for some reason.
— Isabelle5

Thank you, Isabelle.

Even if I usually produce poems too long for most (apparently) to enjoy, I like small pieces. Like bites.
— dandy

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