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And You Were Ivy Climbing Momma's Grave
the_recluse

you were lost poetry,
 1
stanzas sonnets never started.
 2
you were breath on frozen windows,
 3
color shining through a quiet mist.
 4
you were cold apartments,
 5
city lights from fifty floors
 6
and sleeping 'neath a pile
 7
of someone else's clothes.
 8
 
 
you were rides bummed off
 9
of tired truckers,
 10
greying beards, sad stories
 11
of forgotten dates, forgotten names.
 12
you were the outskirts of nashville,
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late december
 14
dim christmas lights on icy streets.
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you were pop songs on the radio,
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melodies in soothing static.
 17
you were talking to the night
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and expecting a response;
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you were crickets
 20
you were owls
 21
and you were cars on sundry streets.
 22
 
 
you were hissing rain and autumn sweaters.
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you were stale coffee, patchouli perfume
 24
 
 
and you were someone else's muse
 25
before I ever had the nerve
 26
to dream of you.
 27

16 Feb 07

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Exquisite, beginning to end.  Thank you for this, whoever you are.
 — Isabelle5

do you read much ginsburg?
 — unknown

Isabelle - Thank you.

unknown - Not that much. I sometimes find him hard to stomach.
 — the_recluse

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