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Fields
infinity

written 2/8/07

Sometimes when the day seems long
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I wish i could just run around
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in fields or just lye down
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against the cold grass where
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there is no pain just your
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back against the earth
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as the cold, bitter wind swirls
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above you and it's in
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these moments that you
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feel you can find peace
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and actually feel good
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to be alive but as
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time passes you always
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have to stand up and return
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to the stagnant life
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Sometimes i just wish i could
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be 7 again and lay in
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that field forever let the
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sun rise and fall above you but
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you're happy because there's no pain.
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15 Feb 07

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one of my favourite subjects - open sky and open fields :) - and childhood freedom to know the world is endless

and here is death too - life's little reminder to enjoy those open skies and fields - i like this very very very much

-Mong-
 — Mongrol

you have made me feel both joy in your words and sadness for your loss
very nicely done

-Mong-
 — Mongrol

This is a poem that brought much of my childhood flooding back through my mind.

Larry hemmed in Lark
 — larrylark

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