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MEB
Silent-Lotus

With silken locks and eyes of jade
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My love… my only… my little maid
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Frail body adorned in the glow of love
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The envy of the angels above
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The envy of Aphrodite
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Created from sugar by God Almighty
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She’s lovely, radiant, and immersed in love’s glow
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A goddess from long ago
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“My perfect dream” as I once said
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I was talking about MEB
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14 Feb 07

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I love it.  Thank you, Andy.
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..............

/die laughing

Andy, you're priceless. And this isn't badly written, either.

Repetition of "glow of love" then "love's glow" is kind of weak, surely your "little maid" is inspirational enough for more than that.

I still love it, perhaps because of personal bias. (10)

Teo.
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I love Mary E. Babb too.
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Who doesn't love Mary E. Babb?!
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who wrote this? i'm intrigued.

havn't seen Mary on here for ages. that makes me sad.
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Mary, the prettiest pc user, has been gone for months.
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Mary is beautiful.
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