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I love to see you below me
unknown

We run into my closet
 1
And hide behind the clothes hamper.
 2
I cover Teddy’s ears so he won’t hear your threats.
 3
 
 
Inside of me, I don’t know what to feel,
 4
My emotions are running.
 5
Alone, scared, and despairing.
 6
 
 
I close my eyes to think of a better time.
 7
Family dinners with everyone around the table
 8
We’re all filled with smiles.
 9
What happened since then? Did I do something wrong?
 10
I’m sorry that I didn’t clean my room that one time
 11
I promise that I’ll try to remember.
 12
 
 
I hear her struggled to unlock the chest.
 13
The chest that holds the gun.
 14
Her screams have a stamp in my mind.
 15
 
 
My thoughts are interrupted by the vibration of the wall.
 16
My curiosity tempts me.
 17
I try to stay put because you told me to hide when he gets like this.
 18
I’m running out of excuses to tell Teddy.
 19
I tell him we’re hiding because we’re playing hide n seek.
 20
He believes me.
 21
 
 
I hear a thump outside the door
 22
 
 
Intensity doubles and I battle to stay put.
 23
In a panic, I tell Teddy to count to a thousand,
 24
And I rush to open the door.
 25
 
 
The gun is lying two feet in front of me,
 26
My mother on the ground
 27
And I see your eyes meet mine.
 28
Taking the gun, I point it right at you.
 29

11 Feb 07

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I hope you shot the bastard.  Good story.  You had me at 'closet'.
 — unknown

I like this.
I want to be a social worker...it spoke to me.
 — meghanmidget

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