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Poem 6
AdamHart

Critics comments welcome. Sure, I'm not poetic. I believe you. It's not like the schools teach good poetry here. I can tell this one won't make hardly any sense, but it's not like I have an inept view of poetry. I just figure, your opinion doesn't justify who I am, and I better express myself through instrumental music. Poetry is not my strong art; it's not a form of art I can embrace fully. Internet critisism, laugh out loud. By the way, this is before I started writing even more free verse, which is presently.

Say
 1
How are you
 2
on this day
 3
what's your favorite
 4
game to play, hey,
 5
who are you
 6
what are our differences
 7
besides boy and girl
 8
living in this world
 9
we are two lone souls
 10
living astray
 11
each and every day
 12
to ourselves we sing
 13
that's just our way
 14
well,
 15
where might you
 16
live or dwell
 17
so that i can come
 18
we can sing a song
 19
in the rain or the sun
 20
yet my search
 21
has begun
 22
can i talk to you
 23
we can trade words
 24
and watch the birds
 25
or later fly
 26
and sing
 27
about the things
 28
that we've dreamed about
 29
but
 30
what are we about
 31
do we like or do we love
 32
it seems I've sung alone
 33
no one on the phone
 34
no dogs on the run
 35
what are we about?
 36
what am I about?
 37

10 Feb 07


(define the words in this poem)



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