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I believe
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I believe in love at first sight and I
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remember the day I first saw you. I believe
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you told me I’m beautiful and I smiled because
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I believed in you. Now I believe in young love and
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in trips to the park to lay on the grass and
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find shapes within the clouds while
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listening to Hummingbirds sing about spring.
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I believe in stopping to smell the flowers
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and in kisses that make me shiver all
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the way down to my toes. I believe actions
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speak louder than words. I believe in
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phone calls just to say hello and I believe
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in meeting you at your car to drive around
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Norfolk until 3 a.m. I believe in summer
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road trips, pictures of friends, and daring
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to be different. I believe in the words “I love you”
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and that makes me believe in fear. I believe
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in rewards for old-fashioned hard work;
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I believe in optimism and in saying “I can”
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even when I can’t. I believe in staring
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into your eyes so long I memorize the
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gold flecks surrounding the pool of brown.
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I believe in spending cool fall nightst
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finding constellations in the stars; I believe
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in holding hands, but I believe PDA
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makes everyone watching feel lonely;
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I believe in being lonely to know the meaning
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of being loved. I believe in taking time to
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kiss every inch of my lover’s body; I believe
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in the kind of hugs that cure a cold winter day
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better than chicken noodle soup. I believe
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in the passion I feel when I sing my secrets
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to the cold steering wheel; I believe anything’s
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possible and at one time, I believed in promises
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and the word “forever.” I don’t believe in the
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word “goodbye” and when you said it, I realized
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I’ve always believed I deserve more from you.
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7 Feb 07

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So pretty! I would suggest altering "PDA" to something else, it really sticks out. Cheers!
 — BelaFloro

i believe every line in this poem is a bad cliche.

reads like an overly motivational hallmark card.
 — rosemary

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