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[Dares always scare me.]
For_Forsaken

I can still feel our sex between my legs
 1
    as I'm driving home:
 2
I'm hot, wet, and swollen.
 3
I'll be sore until morning.
 4
 
 
Your insecurities whispered
 5
    in the stillness of my car
 6
make you seem a little more human.
 7
 
 
Truth: You're my wildest fantasy.
 8
     (The sky's the limit.)
 9
 
 
 
 
12-27-06
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Forever and Always

29 Jan 07

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wow.
yep.
u-huh,
you nailed it.
Jen-
 — jenakajoffer

Thank you, Jen.  I appreciate the comment.
 — For_Forsaken

your welcome, i like this poem very much!
i do have one suggestion:
remove "the" in L4.
oh, and the last line is questionable.
i think this would be find w/out it, but it's your poem.
great, regardless,
Jen-
 — jenakajoffer

Hm, good suggestion.

I'll think over what you said about the last line.

Thanks for revisiting.

-FF
 — For_Forsaken

this is really powerful.
I'm not sure how i feel about lines 8-9, it is something that would normally bother me, and yet, somehow it really works.
 — sarahjoie

Thank you for the comment, sarahjoie.  
 — For_Forsaken

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