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For_Forsaken
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I can still feel our sex between my legs
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as I'm driving home:
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I'm hot, wet, and swollen.
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I'll be sore until morning.
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Your insecurities whispered
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in the stillness of my car
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make you seem a little more human.
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Truth: You're my wildest fantasy.
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(The sky's the limit.)
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12-27-06
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Forever and Always
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29 Jan 07 |
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wow.
yep.
u-huh,
you nailed it.
Jen-
— jenakajoffer
Thank you, Jen. I appreciate the comment.
— For_Forsaken
your welcome, i like this poem very much!
i do have one suggestion:
remove "the" in L4.
oh, and the last line is questionable.
i think this would be find w/out it, but it's your poem.
great, regardless,
Jen-
— jenakajoffer
Hm, good suggestion.
I'll think over what you said about the last line.
Thanks for revisiting.
-FF
— For_Forsaken
this is really powerful.
I'm not sure how i feel about lines 8-9, it is something that would normally bother me, and yet, somehow it really works.
— sarahjoie
Thank you for the comment, sarahjoie.
— For_Forsaken
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