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[Dares always scare me.]

I can still feel our sex between my legs
    as I'm driving home:
I'm hot, wet, and swollen.
I'll be sore until morning.
Your insecurities whispered
    in the stillness of my car
make you seem a little more human.
Truth: You're my wildest fantasy.
     (The sky's the limit.)

Forever and Always

29 Jan 07

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you nailed it.
 — jenakajoffer

Thank you, Jen.  I appreciate the comment.
 — For_Forsaken

your welcome, i like this poem very much!
i do have one suggestion:
remove "the" in L4.
oh, and the last line is questionable.
i think this would be find w/out it, but it's your poem.
great, regardless,
 — jenakajoffer

Hm, good suggestion.

I'll think over what you said about the last line.

Thanks for revisiting.

 — For_Forsaken

this is really powerful.
I'm not sure how i feel about lines 8-9, it is something that would normally bother me, and yet, somehow it really works.
 — sarahjoie

Thank you for the comment, sarahjoie.  
 — For_Forsaken

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