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Little Boxes of Blood
avermitsky

you had:
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little boxes of blood
 2
for my birthday,
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just a little something
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-you said
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just a little something for you:
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a little
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box of blood
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for your birthday
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-you said, a box of blood:
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just a little
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thoughtful -you said,
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for you
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brought you: little
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boxes full of
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blood -you said,
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birthdays or (something I picked
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up) anyways, oh maybe just
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a little
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a small thing really:
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your heart,
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boxes of blood,
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little boxes: just blood
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for a birthday
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small: your hearts,
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insides, boxes of blood
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for your birthday -you said
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small: blood, hearts, boxes:
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no big thing
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open it
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-you said
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26 Jan 07


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boxes of blood....this would be better if I wasn't so retarded and could understand what it meant....
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