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Tea with the Hounds

I would return there
if only for a safe, wintery kiss
from within those silken quarters
that I so dearly miss
your arms have since
cold as has
that English bliss
and new love bears fulfillment-
I thought I'd tell you this.

25 Jan 07

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I wonder if you need 'now' in line 7.  Isn't that implied in "have since?"  What do you think?  This is very light somehow.  I love Kate Bush singing while she's running through the forest...ummmmmm.  Is that on the CD?  I borrowed a friend's.
 — Isabelle5

 — Isabelle5

Isabelle!  Thankyou!  You're right about "now" in L7.  I'll axe it.  I think you're thinking of "The Sensual World" where she's runnin' through the forest.  Her latest album, "Aerial," is a masterpiece.  Hope you're warmer in Cali than we are in Maine right now.  Love, Starr
 — starr

Nice to see some fans of Kate's speaking about her - and to have a nicely written and formed poem inspired by one of her finest works

Mong :)
 — Mongrol

Thanks, Mong!  I've adored Kate since 1978 when she first came out and here we are almost 30 years later and I still adore her.  :-) backatcha!
 — starr

nice rhymygizmo
consider grown as its own line?
being about tea, and your rhyme sound

i was half expecting to see pee...
byebye for now, enjoy your tea.
 — chuckles

Thanks Chuckles!  Made grown its own line.  "Being about tea?"  I'm not so sure I understand (as the rules of poetry often throw me anyway), but hey...consider it done (I just don't know WHY I did it)!  Nice weekend, brotha!  Starr
 — starr

groan (grown)

being about tea, and your rhyme sound (iss)--

i was half-expecting to see pee
byebye for now, enjoy your tea.

'swhat i meant.
 — chuckles

Cool poem beautifully wrought and redolent with the feel of a wintery wind blown day blowing dead leaves hither and thither.

Larry thithered Lark
 — larrylark


 — chuckles

Thanks, Larry Don't Forget to Feed the Dogs Lark.  :-)
 — starr

who needs sugar when you've got earl grey
and this beautiful poem!
all i need now is a baby cookie.
very nice starr, love it.
 — jenakajoffer

Thankyou, Jennnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn!!!  You are too sweet (not by sugar though!)  I'll see if I can't email you a Lorna Doone or a Zwieback Toast!  Loveyaback...Starr
 — starr

30 years ago and you're still only 28!  Amazing!  (hahah- starry, starry man...you know the tune, right?)
 — Isabelle5

thx for the email Starr,
it's taking 4EVER to open it so I haven't done it yet...dialup hell!!!
But I will,
 — jenakajoffer

Thanks, Jen for all the helpful critiques on P.C. !  Love, Starr
 — starr

Hey, hot stuff.  I dig it.  With or without the reference to Kate Bush.  In fact, I could go without knowing about what you were listening to.  Sometimes the mystery is a good thing.  
 — aforbing

Thanks, Aforbing.  Hot stuff, huh?  Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr...  :-) &nb sp;I took off the little reference to what inspired this poem.  Take care.  
 — starr