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Dance around me
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Spinning round and round
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Moving so rhythmically
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To a phantom sound  
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Chanting, laughing all around
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A sacrificial lamb
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Knifes at the ready you turn once more
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Dancing around me you begin to bore
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This little game so frightening
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This little game is ending
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The river is forming
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Flowing between your toes
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This river made of your foes
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Once again you dance
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Though this time it is away with out a glance
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Woot another poem to post maybe this one will get better reviews than the last I put up

24 Jan 07

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hokay-
5 stars...
 — chuckles

I like it and have a title idea for you "battle at the merry-go-round" or
"if the second amendment involved high school"
 — turtlepoet

Will its not really about that...its almost litteral, like a friend stabbing you in the back or something.
 — Hidden_words

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