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Silence
Jillian

This is just letting my mind wonder writing random things let me know what you think. This is not like the other 2.

Airplane sound whistles
 1
My head buzzing
 2
My hands bleed
 3
My friends worry
 4
My lies cheat
 5
My mind wanders
 6
what does this mean?
 7
looking for a sign
 8
looking for a place
 9
Is this relevant ?
 10
Is this fate?
 11
Footsteps come closer
 12
People mumble.
 13
Footstrps leave
 14
Left alone yet again
 15
nothing to do
 16
slience sits upon me
 17
my pen moves thoughtless
 18
the knife goes in deep
 19
the note is almost finished
 20
as so is my life.
 21

18 Jan 07


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Interesting, Well since you did say it was only random Ive got to say Im sure you can do better.
I honestly didnt like the writing as a whole but there were some things I wanted to ask, I found line 5 says my lies cheat, How is that so?
 — XxArsonxX

XxArsonxX,
My lies cheat myself. I lie in order to make others feel better. Make myself feel better. They cheat in life. They make me one step higher. When really they should bring me to the bottom for lying but, they bring me to the top to suceed what I want.  
Thank You,
 — Jillian

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