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soup and a spoon
gjenkins

I had been tryin'
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to put this poem
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down
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ever since my brother
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died
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but it just
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wouldn't
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come
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so, I read a couple
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of books, Poe, Eigner,
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Bukowski, no inspiration.
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the sun slant across
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snow top homes in
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my police infested
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neighborhood
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people walked back
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and forth intent on destinations
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I drank and
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sweated in my
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cold little apartment
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trying to find my way
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out
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"Well,"I said to myself, "that's
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enough of that."
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I put my brown suit
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in a garment bag
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polished my shoes,
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socks, shaver, comb
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train ticket, cell phone
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I had everything
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except for what I needed
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16 Jan 07

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L4 - *ever
 — heat-her

awesome. i really like the simplicity of this poem, yet how it at the same time displays such a vivid and specific emotion. so honest, interesting, and undoubtedly clever. rock on.
 — lanezfairy

Since you mentioned Poe in this poem, I give you a 10/10! Wonderful line. The middle part of line 10 was the best.
 — Henry

Simply stylish well thought out. Keep reading those books

Larry
 — larrylark

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