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Orinoco Flow
ranjeet

Rio Grande did flow beside me
 1
Choosing to depart
 2
Picked up my spade & symphony
 3
For to make a start
 4
 
 
Troop along the muddy sludge
 5
For to make me stagger
 6
Swallow a tortoise-shell fudge
 7
To fuel my cloak & dagger
 8
 
 
Anger breeds my jealousy
 9
My bitterness & contempt
 10
As I watch the leopards feed
 11
I lay down beside her & wept
 12
 
 
She did no wrong at evensong
 13
Her baked cake, bitter stew
 14
I could rejoice at the fish pond
 15
My desires returning anew
 16
 
 
Below me, fish boiling in water murky
 17
Bubbling as bitter feuds
 18
I hatch a plan to avoid cold turkey
 19
As I lay among the ruins
 20
 
 
Feet on temple step beside me
 21
I capture the epitaph
 22
As I embrace the ecstasy
 23
& rejoice on her behalf
 24
 
 
Alas, my pew is bloody still
 25
As I survey the Orinoco Flow
 26
Too late for goodbyes now, Jill
 27
Your fate is at the door
 28

12 Jan 07

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azoospermic
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brilliant, I love it!
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enya has that same title!  :D  but the poem is.....nothing like the song.  (;  it's an awesome poem..(;
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this is another sucky rhyming poem.
inept
even the ending was predictable
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