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ma, pa, auntie em
chuckles

the use of father tie
 1
is other nature
 2
 
 
they a sharing tea
 3
he and she
 4
an wife skiing the sea
 5
between ruination
 6
cries of passion and
 7
the healthy suit
 8
of happy ending
 9
 
 
on the lip
 10
iles inch forward
 11
arrow chills and bobs
 12
lobbed into and aid the
 13
 
 
war ash of creation
 14
ages of the universe
 15
 
 
asters of the waves
 16
soothing hoes ripples
 17
asking spas water
 18
to see and be without
 19
aligned swells
 20
 
 
she and father steed
 21
steeped
 22
abled and galloped
 23
through swaps over suits
 24
papered by the lab
 25
of God
 26
 
 
pal to pal they ski
 27
their ode and thee
 28
father the ascot of
 29
tieless she
 30
 
 
this is one of
 31
y axis
 32

11 Jan 07

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WHAT????????  
 — Isabelle5

i see nothing here. words thrown together in a slap dash manner, full of mistakes. this has not been proof read and it reflects not only in style, but in content. no direction.
 — Esoteric

this has been proof-read
it has direction
the title is important...
 — chuckles

I rather feel bad about the comments you've received as what you'r trying to do is apparent - it just hasn't been done very well.
 — unknown

i don't feel bad at all...
i'm gonna keep tryin' it-
as they say
"practice makes perfect"
 — chuckles

"hasn't been done very well"
should be
"hasn't been done"
shouldn't it?
 — chuckles

Yes, it should be "hasn't been done".
I like this one (more than node ease).
It's still a bit of a challenge to get it all, but I think I get most of it.
Really love lines 10-15 and of course 27 to the end.
xo
 — unknown

Can do without reading this.
 — JerryReed

Bologna fucked inutile in the ass. Pass it on.
 — unknown

No, what he has done is NOT apparent or we would be understanding this.  This is one of those times when the poet might want to explain what he was doing so the readers can see it and appreciate it.
 — Isabelle5

dear Isabelle5

i squeezed these words really hard (perhaps too hard)

this is about time and nature...
 — chuckles

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