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In This Sea

I stand close enough
to where the sea
can reach
my feet,
into white foam,
in a tug-of-war
with the wind,
my shadow too
the waters
burying my toes.
I look at you
from this safe distance,
keeping watch
for your return,
aware of the strength
of your pull
the power
you have over me,
in your eyes
that you coldly
while I
wade farther into
the waters
to follow you
deeper into a sea
that I fear.
Now, here you are
swirling around me
my thoughts,
my bearing,
my balance.
You overwhelm me
with your tides, and
with your waves
until I
have no more space
to breathe
your crests and troughs
that pulsate
like my heart
in these waters,
in this sea.

7 Jan 07

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Well done!
 — mmmarkun

Thanks mmmarkun for your feedback.
 — JoelJosol

Whow... I really like this! It feels cold... But very good too...
 — dele

Revised to maintain a consistent verb tense.
 — JoelJosol

love it.

the sense of distance between people, the unrequited love is very well described
 — Mongrol

This is very nice! JoelJosol: I'm sure it is not a coincidence that, when you turn the poem on its side, it forms waves?? Or is it just my overactive imagination??
 — JustineCH

Justine, you're right :-)
 — JoelJosol

Truly excellent well crafted poem that flows beautifully.

Larry smooth as silk Lark
 — larrylark

Thank you, Larry.
 — JoelJosol

Extended the poem a little bit into the sea.
 — JoelJosol

Retitled the poem to make it a bit specific.
 — JoelJosol

Retitled to avoid giving away the content of the poem.
 — JoelJosol