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Cry
devilsbelboy

Rain came down, and thunder landed here
 1
Tears that once only rolled, flowed down there
 2
Booze and sadness have finally taken hold
 3
A cliche of love you could not break the mold
 4
 
 
Cry
 5
Shiver an' shriek, to a broken guitar string
 6
A melody that is broken
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A ghost of love, a murder that was not seen
 8
 
 
Shame it rains on a drunk's lonely tears
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I feel ashamed, how I prayed on her fears
 10
Booze like Rasputin, calculating an' cold
 11
Ashamed I was no better than demons of old
 12
 
 
Cry
 13
Streaming salt, the wound it does sting
 14
A girl's soul it is broken
 15
In a jerk asshole's broken little sling
 16
 
 
Cry on a wounded bleeding sore cheek
 17
I loved her like a hungry dog and his biscut treat
 18
Booze to a boob, nipple to the cold
 19
I came to find myself here so naked an' bold
 20

29 Dec 06

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Comments:

Excellent! In your face good.
 — Rull

I really enjoyed the first stanza.
 — TearDrop

very good. i like it a lot.
 — sabz3003

i dunno it looks okay but i guess i dont feel moved about pitty pieces
 — kronah_kcmg

i like this poem is touch me in places
 — unknown

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