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Pig Speak
larrylark

I ate the tongue of a pig,
 1
bright pink, salivating,
 2
a stink among the gravy.
 3
I munched and mused,
 4
if that tongue could speak
 5
it would recite the names of truffles,
 6
brown, black and sable,
 7
blazing in the heart of a dark forest.
 8

27 Dec 06

Rated 8.7 (8.7) by 12 users.
Active (12): 6, 7, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10
Inactive (0): 5, 10

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"i kissed the tongue of a pig,
he gave me AIDS and told
me where the door was,
he'd licked my kidneys
from inside me. now i
can say harley and death
with such a good tee-shirt."
 — mikebauer

yum yum larry
 — unknown

Hi mikebauer

I liked your take. It had a more substantially porky flavour than mine and seemes full of crackling.

Larry I'm a hog for you baby Lark
 — larrylark

Hi unknown

glad you like my flavour

Larry ox tail Lark
 — larrylark

oink squeal
piggly curly corkscrew tail
 — unknown

oink squeal
piggly curly corkscrew tail
— unknown
sounds from yur bedroom?
 — mikebauer

mike bauer is not a poet.

he is a pip squeak
 — unknown

I like this - it's elemental and the juxtaposition of the talking pig and the 'bright pink salivating' eater is a good way of keeping the conceit going. A bit Orwellian, but rather good for that.
 — unknown

say wot, mate? ermmmm........ jolly good show and all that. Orwellian or Orwellesque?
 — unknown

Something, maybe reading too much poetry, has given me a sty in my eyx.

Larry throbbing vision Lark
 — larrylark

I LOVE this poem.  I don't know why.  I just do; especially L's 3, 6 & 8.  Your use of imagery is just awesome.  Happy New Year.  
 — starr

larrylark!!!  i had no idea!!!  this has got to be YOUR BEST ONE yet!!!  
 — starr

mike bauer is poet in his own way,.......he a genius in an obnoxious way, and i love it
 — crismonblue

Larrylonglivelark.  :-)
 — starr

must have been a french pig

cute
 — unknown

What's the pig deal about this poem?
 — unknown

Dear Starr

This is based on a piece of bacon rind which i used one day to tie up my shoe laces when one broke so i could go for a walk in the woods

Larry Savoy Truffle Lark
 — larrylark

This poem is, in my opinion, one of the most potent pieces of writing I've seen in a long time.  The very second I read it, I loved it.  I knew it would be a #1 Top Rated selection from that point on.  I just knew it.  Keep on, Mike!  I love your stuff.
 — starr

It's Larry's, not Mike's.  I think.
Is the extra space behind "mused" in L4 supposed to be there?  If so, I'd use something more grammatically proper...perhaps...an ellipsis...?
I love the diction, tone, structure, and so forth -- I just didn't draw a much of a conclusion from it.  Not sure why I should be reading it.  Hence a 7.
 — aurelius

Dear aurelius

Thanks for the suggestions which i will consider carefully, that is if i can take myself seriously for long enough.

Larry oink oink Lark
 — larrylark

There is no big deal about this poem unknown. I was bored and my assistant on the farm was ill so i had to swill out the piggery, not a very pleasant thing to have to do at 5am on a Christmas morning. One of the pigs yawned, a curtain drew momentarily back and i was standing in the middle of a dark forest with truffles scattered round my feet with a strange oinking coming from the bushes. Some may call this a visionary moment, others would call it a load of old testicles but it is the way things have always happened on the farm

Larry Old Macdonald Lark
 — larrylark

LOL!  I LOVE this poem, larrylark!
 — starr

haha-funny.
 — unknown

Dear Starr

I'll take it as a yes that you like this one then shall i? My aim though not always true is to please and i really appreciate your support.

Larry good boy Lark
 — larrylark

Well, I could certainly smell the funk in the kitchen while you feasted.
Well done, Larry "that'll do pig" Lark.
Jen-
 — jenakajoffer

hmmyes
nifty-keen
but, L7,8
brown, black, sable, dark, and

blazing???
 — chuckles

Only problem I see is the space between "and" and "mused."  One porker of a poem!  
 — Isabelle5

Hi Isabelle

Thanks for rhe spot. They unfortunately don't all come out like a prime piece of pork from the squealing heart of a pig ,oink oink.

Larry bacon boy Lark
 — larrylark

I like the oxymoron of the blazing blaxk truffles - they do blaze for pigs. Excellent poem.
 — opal

Dear Opal

They really do blaze and you can find your way among them even if the moon is not shining.

larry talking total bollacks lark
 — larrylark

i like your poem
 — jumpoline

Dear Jumpoline

That will do just fine and dandy for me.

Larry beano Lark
 — larrylark

I actually feel sick. Congrats, I guess, on making a truly sickening poem. You horses ass.
 — unknown

Dear Unknown

you migh not know this but offal is considered gourmet food in the outback where I live in my tarpaulin covered shack.

Larry back duds man Lark
 — larrylark

Larry, larry, larry, I eat pickled pigs feet but I don't write poems about them.
 — unknown

Dear Unknown

then you jolly well should

Larry boss porker Lark
 — larrylark

I think there should be subject matter consideration when writng a poem. An artist creates a composition that is worthy of viewing, or they should.
 — unknown

It all depends I suppose on what the artist sees as beautiful does it not. One mans car crash is another mans daffodil.
 — unknown

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