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Winter Blossom
Mongrol

turpentine silk clings to the body -
 1
illusion cast,
 2
 
 
serpentine clothing coils to the floor -
 3
sakura pink,
 4
 
 
valentine child spins in the air -
 5
tinted white,
 6
 
 
palatine decoration flickers in soft light -
 7
old season,
 8
 
 
libertine hearts pulse and ache together -
 9
deathless youth,
 10
 
 
pristine flower cradles the dawn -
 11
call the sun,
 12
 
 
clarity stays for the duration
 13
the blush is on your cheek.
 14

11 Dec 06


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It's poems like this that make me realize I'm in a mediocre class of poets. This is the kind of writing that sets apart who is truly talented (the author of this poem) and who writes in spare time just as a hobby (me.) I wish I could describe things in this way. I think it's brilliant.
 — Andiam

thank you Andiam

your words are most kind
 — Mongrol

can you help me out with the turpentine silk and the palatine decoration?
I love l11-14.

Sam
 — unknown

the turpentine silk is more the colour of the silk - a dark reddish wood coloured brown - like varnished wood

palatine is related to a palace - like a grand garden in a palace
 — Mongrol

i think it's quite nice
 — unknown

thnk you unknown

:)
 — Mongrol

slightly updated
 — Mongrol

i love this. no suggestions. oh, except maybe the title seems too plain for the poem.
 — inutile

thank you inutile :)
 — Mongrol

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