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I delivered the truth
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for years and years:
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revered postman.
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The goods yielded smiles
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from tenants and guests
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and not one attempt
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to give back a bad.
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Yes, the job had perks,
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proud every time,
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uniformed and chosen.
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But this fine monday,
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my day of rest,
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the doorbell rang,
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it was delivered.
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I get visits
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now and then,
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bad and good.
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The uniform
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is kept impeccable.
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I still have boxes
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in the basement,
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each full to the brim,
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still always, outdated.
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28 Oct 06

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It reads smooth enough. The picture this makes in my head: a retired post man with a different job now (that gives him Mondays off) sits in his livingroom, then receives a package at the door and states that there are boxes of undelivered mail in his basement from when he slacked off and didn't deliver what he was supposed to. Did your poem give (me) your reader the correct picture of what you wanted to relay? I am thinking it probably didn't, but if that was what you wanted to show, then you did it!
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