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Thought Process
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It is a mental game of fun times, surrounded by a tin foil of bliss.

Someone never asked me,
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how do you feel about love?
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I never replied,
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"it is the strongest emotion next to hatred."
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Furrowed bro, this imagery,
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mystical being, of a figment, of my imagination,
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never clambered for an argument.
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"Love is the most powerful emotion,"
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they said,
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"for hatred makes you want to destroy
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someone's very life force, but...love
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can actually cause you to destroy someone's soul."
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I never laughed, this never taking place,
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but I did never reply,
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"I agree, I would kill for love."
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Although never knowing love, and
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never being lost in the haze
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of emotional bombardments
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I never remembered realizing this.
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Never, ever, forever, will I know love?
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22 Oct 03

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I love the way this is written.
Instead of an experience, I mean. The way 'never' is used makes it into something hypothetical. I love it.
 — unknown

Completely brilliant and.... I love it. The form, the word choice, the imagery is just great. I cant even think of anything else to say. I would love to read more from you, keep up the good work youre a great writer.
 — ShelbyS

wow!~ This is soo good!! There are really are no words to say.... wow!~
 — unknown

I personally thought this poem was shitty when I wrote it, but whatever floats you kids boats.
 — pissant5

thought process! what thought process. there's a typo in the second line!
 — unknown

one of the best poems i've read. ever. well done.
very porfessional.
very mature.
very unique.
very awesome. :D
 — Romanspring

i don't think that is an accurate portrayal of love, i'm sorry.

whilst it is only my opinion, i think jelousy is really what quite a lot of your poem is about, and that is wholly different from love; it may result from love working on a weak mind, but it is separate.
 — nicl

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