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the street
Virgil

night
 1
on the sidewalk
 2
i step in a puddle,
 3
         glass chrysalis skyscrapers
 4
shatter, dissolve, radiate
 5
sprays of light.
 6
 
 
glow hits us,
 7
but slides  
 8
off         an electric blue
 9
violin nearby
 10
 
 
its musician:
 11
a youth with dreaded hair,
 12
some disciple of aquarius
 13
who remembered what power
 14
flowers had.
 15
a change pail at his wet feet,
 16
rusted dull like age.
 17
 
 
i wanted to leave something
 18
for being there, toss a coin
 19
into the dark pools of his eyes
 20
hid in a grease jungle of hair,  
 21
         every motion a wish.
 22

9 Oct 06


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wow, this is amazing. i LOVE the imagery. the whole thing is fantastic.
 — caustic

thanks. any recommendations?
 — Virgil

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