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We wrap these words
mrfox

We wrap these words
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so hard and tight
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round open wounds,
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near broken pride.
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Quick ball them up
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to throw around and then:
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They come back lost.
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No one even caught them.
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5 Oct 06

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lumps in throats, swallowed pride
blinked back tears and so it died.
will it returneth with-with  great flairith
or will it just die and will nobody care if
 — john_daker

Thank you so much for the exceedingly positive comment!
 — mrfox

Youe use of enjambement adds to the titles meaning. I like the way words can have new meaning upon seeing/hearing them again.
Although this poem looks awkward in written form, I found it worked very well when spoken aloud. I enjoyed this.
 — gogo

Cool poem
Meep
 — unknown

irate notes, idle pride
John Daker wrote (he's so alive!)
'will it returneth with-with great flairith'?
well here are some lines, let's see if he tears it.
 — mrfox

This is pretty good, and that's saying something from me becuase I normally don't like short poems.
 — mylifestyle

Thanks for the comment
how would you fix it up so it's remarkable?
 — mrfox

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