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run
Rousseau

flights amber radiance
 1
is simply not enough
 2
when one can simply
 3
run.
 4

18 Aug 06

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dont run - you are one of the good ones
 — unknown

you'll be sorely missed, thanx for your contribution . . .
 — redsky

rousseau, i know you are gone, but I wanted to say that I think you have done a good job of experimenting towards the style we talked about a few months ago.  i see this piece as a big improvement.  Good for you.
 — jerotich

I like this. see you around R.
 — unknown

flights or flight's...?  Wonder if the author will realize flights doesn't make any sense at all, but since he (?) has said his tearful goodbye and washed his hands of PC, we'll just be left with this twelve-word mistake.
 — unknown

That you're leaving makes some sigh,
to me it's just a long goodbye.
 — Storytime

lol unkown
 — unknown

bye.
 — unknown

Add self-possession to your flights (').
Another trim of your poem:


Amber radiance of flight
is not enough when one may
simply run


I am missing Gareth.  
 — netskyIam

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