I liked the last stanza but i think that the rest needs to be edited. It seems stilted and does not seem to flow well. Thanks for sharing this. (and posting it a few times, sometimes it takes a while to get noticed here.)
I get you, it needs some work. i just need some critique.
I'm reading and re-reading it...will take some time and try to come up with some critique. I usually suck at it though.
hey hows it going? lines 12/13 if your using an enjambement then I would uncapitalize "By" I'd alos maybe lose one of the friend/companion states. Or split the line. You should be careful of those "lord of the rings" come "Anam Cara" cliches though. I dig what this has, but I think that right now it needs to be whittled away at. THere is a very strong piece in there though so please do some work on it. I'll mark it when it's finished