I like the content and the images and metaphors. The format is a bit distracting.
L6-7 amazing , L11 seems out of place , unless you mean by it that no one cares about the war which makes the worst kind.
I'm fucked - my Words are Fucked - my style is Fucked - my country is Fucked -
this is my Fuck'n poetry - and you can go Fuck yourself. Is this original enough for you?
Here's an Epiphany that died in an afterthought
It's a little bit 'patti smith',
only gone very-wrong.
I don't understand.
this is the bestest poem ever!!!
ehm- patti smith on nutmeg