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Night's Afternoon Dance
SteelAngel

The butterfly dances
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to the melodic hum
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and lace wings beat to the eternal rhythm
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of the summer's sunny afternoon
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Each flower- a poised partner
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to sheer dark wings
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shimmering like a starry night
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in the brilliance of the afternoon
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2 Jul 06

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beautiful
 — unknown

pie and chips, for free!

oops, I mean.

melodic hum and lace wings.

Good words, good words all around.
 — unknown

I like the calmness this evokes....i might've changed the last line, but the rest is for me very soothing
 — mr_e

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