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Sex
starr

It's not perfect
 1
but I make up for it
 2
with my tongue
 3
and fingers-
 4
 
 
It's before I
 5
go to work
 6
 
 
It's before you
 7
go to bed
 8
 
 
It's over
 9
then I'm
 10
 
 
a
 11
child
 12
again;
 13
 
 
I'm
 14
not
 15
perfect.
 16

29 Jun 06

Rated 7.7 (8) by 3 users.
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if at first you dont succeed try try again!
 — unknown

Thanks for the 7 and for the encouragement!  
 — starr

Recycling, at a guess.

Meep
 — unknown

hmm...

tongue and fingers
press into flesh
to make up for the abscence
i hope
this effort has satiated

umm hmm perfect poem in imperfection perfection
 — unknown

this made me smile :)
very enjoyable.
 — joewaysack

Thanks, everyone, for the sweet feedback.  Glad it made you smile, Joe.  Peace.
 — starr

I like... from what I understand, this poem focuses on the physical elements of sex no?
I think there are so many psychological elements of sex playing their roles, perfection is not possible... but mental states can do just as much as tongues and fingers.  N'est pas?
 — idontknow

You're absolutely right, "Idon'tknow!"  Thanks 4 the comments!  Sorry...I don't understand French.
 — starr

N'est pas? = isn't it so? or in that context don't you think?
 — idontknow

I like it. It's very simply written but refreshingly honest.
 — bleach

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