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Captain America's Rabbit Hat
Mithrandir

Convex mourning in the shire of lard
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epitomes scratched in a carton of sticks
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potatoes--fried; hippocampus, cerebellum
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from your couch to your car to Micky-Dee's
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cooked up hot and fresh to slather
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all your fallacious hunger and woes
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-ii-
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A buck, three-fourths thimble crude
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the sky screams as her skin is ruptured
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first Australia, now suburbia
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who herself, covered in look-alike boils
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would like to thank good Mr. Ford
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for sticking it 'til the sun won't shine
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-and then-
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The cold red mud of New Orleans
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tidbits of flesh like grout betwixt cobblestones
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open the wine-sinks and open the brothels
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let the boys hump while their city is governed by rats
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-these are the words of millennial-beat-
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Without kin, no man can judge himself kindly.
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6/9/06
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Please critique--rate as is, but offer suggestions.

9 Jun 06


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