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uxorious sioux
gnormal

a priori wind so blew
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as he simmered her
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venison stew.
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that beaver pelt soon
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would be the softest
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pain he ever knew.
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thanks to wendz for that gluxorious word!

14 May 06


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Sioux is offensive to native Americans. they prefer to be referred to as Dakota or Lakota.
 — unknown

If you're going to be so specific and PC, unknown, why forget the Santee or the Yankton Yanktonai? And every single native American finds that offensive? Even the Nez Perce and Yaqui prefer to be called Dakota or Lakota?

Way to generalize in the name of political correctness.
 — dandy

I don't know about those other nations
I only know what my native american friends who are Lakota
feel.

ANd anyway I think anyone reading this would know I was not referring to each and every nation of Native Americans on the continent.  
 — unknown

And that's how it feels, unknown, to have someone ignorantly attack your words.
 — dandy

Not ignorant - uxorious - is perfect for this poem
but you could have used a better word than Souix.

If you are trying to create the beautiful and sexy picture of a warrior and his wife
in the midst of lovemaking - then why degrade it by using a word that is offensive to the people the poem is about.
 — unknown

> If you are trying to create the beautiful and sexy picture
> of a warrior and his wife in the midst of lovemaking

i am not.
(also, "gag me!")
 — gnormal

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