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Sulphur
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Sulfuric acid
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replaced your soul.
 2
 
 
Your personality became colorless
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except for red anger,
 4
which covered you;
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on days that you hurt, I cried
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in the agony of my sleep, wishing
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for just one break
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from you. It would seem a
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shame that you would always blame
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me for your unhappiness, even though you knew
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I made you happy.
 12
 
 
You came back to me
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in my nightmares, even after I had
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long left your lair. You
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smeared my eyes
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with sulphur, and
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I screamed in waking terror.
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21 Apr 06

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he did that to me.
 — unknown

thanks unknown. i hope things improved if you're serious.
 — listen

lines  3- 5 niiiiiiiiiiiice.
lines 15- 17 scaryyyyy.
 — trochee

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