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A Heart That Would Cheat
Rull

You soaked up my sweet talk
 1
And let it spill into conclusions
 2
Only you saw as real.
 3
 
 
To me you were just
 4
A welcomed source
 5
To ease my lonely days.
 6
 
 
I had no mind to keep
 7
A heart that would cheat.
 8
My interest began to wane
 9
When I saw keep me in your eyes.
 10
 
 
The heat so hot between us
 11
Began to cool and chill.
 12
Our months of sweet affection
 13
Had found a bitter end.
 14
 
 
" I gave up everything for you!"
 15
You weeped into my ears.
 16
"I never asked you to!"
 17
I shoved back in your face.
 18
 
 
The truth of what I said
 19
Made you crumble at my feet
 20
As "Why?" came tumbling from your lips.
 21
"Because I never thought you would."
 22
Went hurling from my mouth.
 23
 
 
"I thought you loved me."
 24
You wept into the floor.
 25
"I did!" I snapped into my roar.
 26
"Until you broke your vows."
 27
 
 
"I did it for you."
 28
You moaned inside your growing pain.
 29
But I would not be moved
 30
Beacause I knew a cheater
 31
Would always cheat again.
 32

29 Aug 03

Rated 6 (5.5) by 4 users.
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I was confused by this. I think I see what the broken vow was. I love lines 2-3, 10. I am struck by the immaturity of this person being loved so much and the he/she tries to turn the tables by blaming the lover for the 'cheating' act of falling in love.
 — Isabelle5

gar-bage.
 — unknown

Tut-tut. Don't be jealous.
 — Isabelle5

"jealous."

Cough.
 — unknown

I'm glad u left him, i'm unsure of what he did but "i never asked you to" that's harsh
 — unknown

I really liked this poem....I have been through the same shyt that you had to endure....Its not the funnest thing to go through...I'm glad that you ended yours just like I ended mine....I myself have moved on and found a better more trusting person to be with....I hope you do the same.....Wonderful Poem.....
 — GoThIcSlUt69

If I was a diabetic, I'd go into a diabetic seizure. This was such a saccharine poem, that it was overwhelming. 5/10
 — Henry

I admire the raw emotion conveyed here. There are some faults with the line structure but its big plus is its vivid immediacy that hits the reader between the eyes.

Larry i did it for love Lark
 — larrylark

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