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Dipped in the ink of hope
unknown

A tear dropped from my eye
 1
and tore me apart
 2
as I read through the pages
 3
of the diary of your heart.
 4
 
 
Words not written,
 5
never meant to be read,
 6
feelings unspoken,
 7
if only you had said.
 8
 
 
Loneliness, willing, solitude and rage,
 9
screaming out from within an open cage.
 10
 
 
But I never listened,
 11
wasn't willing to hear,
 12
now you're gone
 13
and I need you near.
 14
 
 
So page by page
 15
and letter by letter
 16
I'll rewrite the pages
 17
of the of diary of your heart...
 18
 
 
"...for now and forever, 'till death do us part"
 19

6 Feb 06

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this would be a great song...loving and losing...regret?....a classic
 — loveart416

line 9 willing should be willingness to make it a noun.
line 13 you're not your (FOR GOD"S SAKE people learn to use apostrophes
It's that little key right next the your enter key.)


other than that you better have some great music to go with it.
 — unknown

ah cutsie, hope you have a great 15th birfday
 — unknown

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