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leave me

sparrow

last night I dreamed of you	1
again- I had let my thoughts slip;	2
in the morning	3
why can't you just	4
leave me,	5
leave me,	6
leave me	7
be - still,	8
it's been a while now	9
still, your shadow lurks	10
up behind me	11
in my dreams	12
I almost kissed you,	13
tasted the forbidden fruit -again,	14
almost held you	15
why can't you just	16
leave me	17
why-	18
do you follow me	19
still, in my dreams	20
when I just want you	21
to leave me	22
stop-	23
I hate this -stop	24
I never said I wanted	25
these memories;	26
stop-	27
making me remember	28
all I want	29
when I try to unravel the strings	30
of the spider's web	31
stop-I never wanted you	32
why can't you	33
-stop	34
following me	35
in my dreams	36
I want you	37
to leave me	38
the color of your eyes	39
to leave me	40
the way your hands felt when we touched	41
to leave me	42
the sweet smell of your skin	43
to leave me - finally	44
leave me	45
now; just	46
stop-	47
you're just	48
a friend	49
don't give me those looks	50
those words	51
I want you	52
to go - away	53
now; finally	54
leave me	55
finally	56
leave me	57
finally,	58
finally,	59
finally	60
leave me.	61

2 Feb 06

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I think 61 should be love me! don't you?
— starwars

would be a great change... as starwars suggests.
nice poem.
— unknown

  tease me ? **** number 61 i mean
— unknown

hey guys... interesting comments...thanks
the fact that "leave me" is repeated so many times is meant to show how it's meaning can change...or  how another word like "love" or "tease" would actually fit better...and yet it reads "leave me"
— sparrow

You got yourself a serious soul tie.  Break that and they'll leave you.
— Scotty-Boy

hey scotty boy... here's a question: how can you break a soul-tie? and is not a characteristic of a "soul-tie" that that it is unbreakable?
i wonder...
— sparrow

Soul ties are spiritual and very persistent.  They certainly can be broken.  How can you break a soul tie?  Through prayer... I am a Christian - I would loose it and bind it by taking authority over it then break it in Jesus' name.  Simple really!


— Scotty-Boy

WOW~WoW~ i can truely say i love this one! i totally feel this way. this is amazing. i feel you wrote about how i feel now. amazing. i'm just connecting with this poem. great work!
— cindy28

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