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Stupourman!
unknown

ENOUGH!!
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He flapped his wings
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and was gone...
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into the night
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The bitch black night
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The unfaithful bitch, black night
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He flew over the usual stuff;
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rooftops, church spires
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deserted shopping centres
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occasional cars, stragglers
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rag tagellers, disheveled
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revellers, marauding
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muggers, perverted
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buggers, underage
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huggers,cuckolding
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fuggers and cold
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cheating slags
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On and on ...
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Over fields and rivers
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Hills and dales
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On and on...  
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till dawn
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The bitch beautiful dawn
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The unfaithful bitch, beautiful Dawn
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texted her sobbing shame, and begged
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him return with a merciful heart
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a pint of milk and a
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small brown loaf.
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10 Nov 05

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you made me thrummm

kaleidazcope
 — unknown

This poem is great. I really like the alliteration and "cockeyed" rhyme scheme. Ah, this treats me.
 — Doulos

Wow LOL I love it. Can you send me a pair of underpants i can wear outside my trousers.

Larry man on a mission Lark
 — larrylark

thrummms up or down K?
thanks a lot, D & L, glad you enjoyed, but a lark in underpants would be just plain cockarsed.

cheers :)
 — unknown

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 — unknown

great use of swearing words,
fantastic poem
 — photobooth

If this rhymed you'd be on to something. 2/10
 — Henry

Ta for comment, p.  Glad you liked.
Ta for bumping this up again, H.
 — unknown

nice.
 — listen

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