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inc_reign

The faded bench at the park
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A place where I watch the clouds
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Veering, verging, deforming shapes
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Spontaneously, barely notice but;
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I wonder when a heart is in misery
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That is the time it opens its eyes
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And see its wondrous changes
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Appreciate those smiles and tranquility.
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That cotton candy shape that was formed
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Reminds my childish mirth before
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I can still taste its sweetness; at the
 11
tip of my tongue it melted.
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That little puppies shape I’ve seen,
 13
Reminds my childhood best buddy
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I can still hear echoes of laughter
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The wind whisper it to me; but
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That was just souvenirs from the past;
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Painted on the clouds, blown away by
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The wind. An abrupt moment I’m reminded
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The beauty of life when I’m still innocent
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When I’m like newborn butterfly
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Off to see the world, full of excitement.
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My colors are still unfaded, my wings
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are still unbroken; and I’m circling, soaring
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Towards the light. Or like a bud if flower blooming
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My petals are still vibrant, my leaves are undusted;
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And I am still thirsty for the rain of truth.
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Yet time comes when butterflies will die
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Slowly as its colors were all gone
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And like a flower that withers
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All that’s left is an unseen spirits.
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As I look down and by my side
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I’ve notice the colors on my guitar
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It’s getting light like this fading bench
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Not like it was back then.
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9 Nov 05

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hmm....just backtracking...i guess..
 — inc_reign

thirsty for the rain of truth. yes.
 — varun

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