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My Greatest Fear
DeathShards

My greatest fear
 1
is not death
 2
but of a single tear
 3
dripping as I cannot draw breath
 4
 
 
It will taste
 5
sour, bitter, rotten.
 6
All those years to waste,
 7
I was - in mere seconds - forgotten.
 8
 
 
My greatest fear
 9
is not breathing any more
 10
but - dripping - a single tear
 11
because you said "I don't love you anymore."
 12

24 Oct 05

Rated 6 (6.8) by 1 users.
Active (1): 6, 7
Inactive (5): 1, 5, 9, 10

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Mr_Private



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Comments:

really nice
 — gears

wow. i really like it... can relate to what you're saying. love that in poems. go you~!
 — nickiblitz

Thanks for the comments
 — unknown

You almost made me cry. bravo
 — Trish77

Lol. I don't think so GodsOnly. -__-

Thanks Trish.
 — DeathShards

umm yeh... nice poem =p

- u noe hu
 — unknown

i love rhyming poems. and this poem rhymes. ^^
-straight to my favourites-
 — unknown

wonderful
 — Mr_Private

Many thanks.

No unknown. I don't know who. >.>
 — DeathShards

ludicrous! who would make this a favourite?
Its pure emo, and deserves all the 1's it gets.
I myself am not that cruel though, so i will give it a 5
 — john_daker

seems a bit corny but is sort of sweet
 — marieF

I love it!
 — unknown

L10- any* not no
 — MEB

Changed. Thanks
 — DeathShards

i really liked it and it deserves alot of credit because of the way the author is letting us know how he/she is really feeling :(
 — unknown

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