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Satin Sheets
Bella

I want to spend the night
 1
in your bed
 2
the cool satin
 3
of your sheets to
 4
brush my skin
 5
ever so slightly.
 6
 
 
I want your lips
 7
to be as magnets
 8
to my own
 9
Your kisses
 10
to graze my sensitive neck
 11
my shoulders
 12
or wherever they
 13
lead you to.
 14
 
 
I want your hands
 15
to comb out every tangle
 16
from my long hair
 17
My hips to
 18
fit perfectly
 19
into yours
 20
My legs draped
 21
ever so gracefully
 22
over yours.
 23
 
 
I want you
 24
to undress me
 25
with only you eyes
 26
but let your fingers follow
 27
Trace the shadows
 28
the candles
 29
cast upon my face.
 30
I want our skin
 31
so softly to touch
 32
our bodies pressed
 33
against eachother
 34
our bodies intertwined.
 35
 
 
I want to make love to you
 36
intense and intimate
 37
to feel your heart
 38
beat against mine
 39
faster and so rhythmic
 40
until I can't differenciate
 41
whose heart
 42
is whose.
 43
Show me your
 44
sensual world
 45
and I'll show you mine-
 46
two intimate universes
 47
open doors and succumb
 48
just to be combined.
 49

25 Mar 02

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Bella, please don't say this was written about me? Loved it, absolutely...
 — JeremyM

Maaaaaybe...and what if it was my dear? Oh see, now I have to write you an email.
 — Bella

Well, then that would be a good thing.
 — JeremyM

See, I told you you were cuter. Don't argue with me Jeremy, I always win;)
 — Bella

I hate to spoil the moment, but you've got a typo in line 26 and 'yours' in line 23 sounds a little repetitive. Otherwise a wonderful poem.
 — unknown

I liked the first three stanzas, but then it just lost it.
 — unknown

Bella,

It sounds a bit pornographic. How old are you? Are you really that hot and horny?
Who was this poem written for? I know it's none of my business, but answer anyway. Otherwise, I guess it's a good poem...
 — unknown

Well, actually, my intentions were not pornographic at all. More around the lines of...sensualgraphic, I suppose you could say. As for my age, that's none of your Goddamned business, sweetheart. I'm old enough. As for who it's about, well- you must REALLY be quite dense if you couldn't figure it out by the first four comments about this particular poem. And the "hot and horny" bit; hot-so I've been told. Horny-no dear, just a human being. For the love of Christ, must I explain myself every time? But thanks ever so much for the, "I guess it's a good poem" comment. Much appreciated, my dear.
 — Bella

Love it bella, makes me want to go find someone to snuggle up to. Made me think, when things make me think its a good thing. toodles
 — thegrinch

Grr, I want someone to snuggle up to...great poem anyway...it upset me greatly. Well done.
 — Moose

Beautiful...Its so pretty. You must be in love.
 — BondageBunny

This is exactly how i feel bout my boyfriend Taye.
 — BondageLover

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