| Earwig Bently hears the music, surrenders the sounds. |
Chuck
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I have fostered all of your limbs, little bug faced fellow, inching,
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kissing your seperate sections, My Intimate Wonderful, you've dared
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sleep in conversation: Always Drowning lonely men climb
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softly and stammering down into the parts of your long brain-faced mind hissing
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that your whole self cannot see but you are not yet blindly quivering. Kissing; the rain gathers around again
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your whole self and
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drips through
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into your ears, answering telephones.
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I can see you in my window crawling again against the water.
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You are behaving drunkly, my stuttering beauty,
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and I am playing the radio for you, rolling away.
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(And Earwig Bently, you will patrol my thoughts
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as they float up and outward toward God,
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tripping over oxygen and shivering naked,
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they scream and continue falling up.
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and up. they never connect.)
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you are walking across
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on the clothesline, decorated in wet weather,
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i reach for you, your manner,
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for your earrings, and tug you
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so that your face ruptures and
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it shatters like any
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insect , still-moving bodies and your whole self
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weeps, you are writhing, weakness,
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your whole is now suffered; convulsing.
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I am missing your itchy method
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as We watch you twitch.
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18 Jul 05 |
Rated 8.8 (8) by 12 users.
Active (12): 1, 5, 7, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10
Inactive (11): 1, 1, 1, 8, 9, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10, 10
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very good, ok?
yes, it is.
— unknown
I thank you for your kind words.
Love,
Chuck
— Chuck
bonjour, i tripped over an oxygen once. add you.
— noodleman
WowEE a ten! Thanks mister!
— unknown
this earwig reminds me of a moth i met once long ago.
— noodleman
Yes, I know which moth you're speaking of and I believe they starred in the same soap opera.
— Chuck
you must tell me of this soap opera sometime perhaps via the electronic mail device. add you for now.
— noodleman
Yessir.
Chuck!
— unknown
Thank you SIR.
this pome, by the way is quite beautiful and marvelous in its novel use of language particularly line 25 which is exquisiteness in its whole self and also lines 2-5 which make me wish to hug myself more oftener.
— noodleman
You sir are a very kind sir!! A very very kind sir!!
Tip of my hat to you.
— unknown
ahh.. beautifully charming.
— midare
Are you Ersaph?
— unknown
I am honored to be compared to such a poet.
— unknown
this is amazing.
— warsager
oh please post more instantly!
— warsager
Thank you so much.
— Chuck
this here is a fine pome yesiree thats right.
— noodleman
them tens sure is purty!
— noodleman
I gave it a ten because I dislike it so much. Are you telling me 10 is for good and 1 is for bad?
— unknown
10 amazing
5 average
1 awful
— unknown
Holy cow shit!
— Chuck
This poem is a brothel-keeper!
— Chuck
Holy bug shit this is good. I will return later to tell you more.
— housepoppy
I thought for sure I was reading rixes. I'll be watching you Chuck.
— housepoppy
Thank you kindly, sir/maddam.
:)
— Chuck
Means nought to me yet. Will come back to, but in mean time will start you off with a five.
— unknown
Translation: "No time to comment, but I sure as hell can rate!"
— unknown
Translation "I want to have Chuck's babies."
— unknown
no no no
— unknown
good in places. must be a default #1.
— unknown
Elaborate, please. Default, how? Please?
— Chuck
I want the world!
I want the whole world!
I want responses and I'll take my chances with ticking brown boxes--
Give it to me now!!
— Chuck
Please, I am starting to assume that you are a jerk. I don't like having these thoughts!
— Chuck
Ass'le!
— Chuck
don't flood the recently commented list, dear.
and the unknown was refering to how long this poem has been in the number one spot, which isn't necessarily a bad thing.
— youthculture
My apologies.
— Chuck
Extra space on line one. And eight, so I'm guessing you meant to? I thought the word was "drunkenly," although now I'm not sure, so I probably just made myself look like an ass.
You've found a way to penetrate my thoughts. This poem plays out in my thoughts. Incredible, and favorited.
— meaka
Ish both.
Drunkenly and drunkly.
I felt more drunkly than drunkenly ;)
Thank you ah, so much.
— Chuck
I also apologize to the unknown. :( I misunderstood.
— Chuck
Don't feel bad, Chuck; I feel the same way about unknown's comment...I still don't see how they weren't being rude.... ah, well.
— meaka
this poem was over my head. i will be awaiting all your future poems, though.
— Lia
it's a default #1 not because it is great but because the other poems available are fair.
— unknown
That's not very nice.
— Chuck
i can understand why you unknowns are intimidated. this guy comes here, posts his first poem and it's better than anything you'll ever be able to write. do you wear rolled up socks in your private areas to make your sexual organs appear more impressive, too?
just curious.
betcha doo!
— unknown
It's worse when I wear my first sock and it's better than anything they'll be able to... wear. I think.
— Chuck
And you are just so niece. I wish i could pinch your cheicks!
— Chuck
there u go revealing your hypocrisy posting your criticisms of unknowns as an unknown. please think before your verbal ejaculations.
— unknown
I don't, because I don't like saggy breasts.
Call me old-fashioned.
— unknown
is it a crime for me to wear socks down my pants? :P
i think chuck is a very good poet, and has a unique writing style, and i will look out for his poems in the future, but the ones he writes now don't really appeal to me (this is not neccessarily a bad thing).
i am not jealous of him, but curious, rather, and eager for more poems.
— unknown
and there u go revealing your hypocrisy posting your criticisms of unknowns as an unknow, as an unknown, unknown. please think before your verbal emasculations.
— unknown
no nits. great read.
— Bloodfetish
eeenteresting.
-Rixes
erm, what?
— unknown
LOL to the unknown above. What a bad impersonation of me!
Yea, I'll get back to the poem later, hopefully.
...*is still laughing*
— Rixes
LOOK AT THIS DAMN POEM.
— OKcomputer
muthafucka
— noodleman
So good!
— kimado
You my friend are my new hero!
— loonytune
I thought line twelve was going to read "Earwig Bentley plays the blues". I would have liked it better if it did. I dig this, anyway. Well done.
— wendz
Vaguely disturbing and eerily beautiful. It gave me a strange sense of calm, though why that is, nobody knows. I'm still not entirely sure if I am correct in assuming that this is about an earwig?? I really like this for some equally unknown reason, possibly the beautiful wording, possibly for the insight, mainly because I can't explain it.
Nice work.
— unknown
I really want to understand this because so much of it oozes creativity and cleverness, but I want to say its almost too clever, asks too much of me as a reader. Its like eating a filet mignon, but not knowing that its the best cut out there, or that you marinaded it for days, or even that it came from a cow; I feel like an ingrate.
And I would be surprised if anyone else could honestly speak differently.
I'll continue; I don't feel like the whole thing must be accessible, but you come dangerously close to losing me completely in several places. Does my honesty sound honest to you? I hope so.
— kite
I know what it is.
It's suicidal madness.
Would you like to see the post effects?
Read a quiet afterlife for Earwig Bently.
Thank you,
— OKcomputer
its unnecessarily wordy and hasn't much point after reading it my initial reaction was this is a joke right? But apparently it is not, so I'll say no more lest the assembled personage be come distraught.
— danamom
You're a genius, aren't you?
— OKcomputer
this is the first part.
— OKcomputer
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