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clothes say look
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your clothes say look.
 1
your face says fuck off.
 2
why the one two?
 3
you fear me or you?
 4

30 Jun 05

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i love your poem
 — bettalpha

No comma in line 4 - otherwise this is short and snappy, like a quick slap on the cheek.
 — Isabelle5

trite, but good.  i wonder how she would respond if you gave her the poem?
 — root

neither. love you.
 — hank

tis alrite man
 — unknown

your clothes say undress me
your face says yuck.
are we gonna get it on
or what the fuck.
 — unknown

Okay.
 — unknown

Hmmm
 — unknown

your clothes say undress me
your face says yuck.
are we gonna get it on
or what the fuck.

lol
this ones equally better.
 — trochee

Bloke walks into a bar in Sydney - sees a good'un and says 'Fancy a shag?' Good'un smiles back - 'Your place or mine?' Bloke exasperated - 'If I'd known you were fussy I wouldn't have bloody asked!'
 — unknown

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