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Its No "Carolina In My Mind"
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You left me hanging like a picture in the hall,
 1
you left me hanging 'round,
 2
waiting for your call.
 3
 
 
I'm making best friends with your answering machine,
 4
It makes me wish you were,
 5
the girl I'd never seen.
 6
 
 
Each day seems to get harder as I go,
 7
I might be glad I met you,
 8
but I hate the things I know.
 9

23 Jun 05

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Love L 4... had a few of those kinds of girls in my life. well done.
 — Evernight

Like the title. nothing else. sorry.
 — unknown

l5 *wish- not a bad poem, but not incredibly interesting.
 — Cloudless

harsh weird different a slightly newer poet type of poem
 — speech_less

I'm the same as the 2nd comment.
 — meaka

I like the meaning and the last verse is wonderful, but the poem has a kinda forced rhyme to it which undermines the meaning of it. work on it and it could be great
 — ForeverAlone

its alright
 — unknown

Amusing.
 — unknown

i like this, it's sweet, I can just hear the sothern accent in the way the poem flows :-)
 — sparrow

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