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Idioms
Rull

Was I barking up the wrong tree,
 1
Was I a cat in a strange garret?
 2
Tell me, was I reading between the lines
 3
Things you didn't impart?
 4
 
 
Did I keep the ball rolling
 5
Because of a slip of your tongue
 6
That was music to my ears?
 7
 
 
Didn't I give you elbow room,
 8
To throw cold water all over me
 9
And keep me at arm's length?
 10
 
 
Am I hanging by a thread,
 11
Do I stand a ghost of a chance
 12
Or am I crying over spilt milk?
 13
 
 
Am I a moment that arrived too soon,
 14
Are you washing your hands of me,
 15
Have I finally hit the nail on the head?
 16

3 Apr 03

Rated 6.6 (6.9) by 7 users.
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I like this. It's quite clever esp. verse 2. Not sure about the title, though. I reckon a mixed cliche would be more apt. ( e.g. Keeping the Ghost rolling ) :)
 — unknown

aha! i think this is fabulous. i kinda of wish the rhythm was more consistant, though - i want it to rhyme.
 — unknown

love is an idiom
the space between pressed palms
that point o no god
 — scitzo

Oh, excellence. This is truly fantastic. Wow. Nothing else to say, really.
 — rosy_giggles

In modismo hell you may tadpole me
rim me

chin me
but remember not
the chimney sweep santa clawed potz

Preciosa del Mariposa on guanajo
 — unknown

would seem on shallow reading just a list of idioms but that's the fun of figuring this poem out. eight, because not all of it is purely your words, but it is your finished product.
 — listen

I jake cox loved this poem
ps i like boys
 — unknown

I love that, nice idea :)

Brilliant job my friend

Keep writing ;)
Samah Kalakh
 — samah_kalakh

this poem is no fish out of water

great stuff
 — Mongrol

awsome. peace out u all.
 — unknown

talk about cliche? this is about as cliche as they come.
 — Trudy

who is this by
 — unknown

oh nvr mind.. great poem.. made me think...
 — unknown

hi
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hi scott
 — unknown

stinky cheese
 — unknown

weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
 — unknown

I LOVE PIE
 — unknown

cj is special
 — unknown

I’ve seen this treatment of idioms before, but I don’t remember if I enjoyed it as much.

I like the ending, and I like the use of caps.
 — wily

There are too many questions asked. This would have been good if it wasn't so bad. To look at a great example of this kind of poetry, look no further than Poe. 7/10 You could have done better. Wasn't horrible though.
 — Henry

Oh geez...it's Rull again. It doesn't suprise me.
 — Henry

Chicken tastes gooder than chicken cloop
 — unknown

BUDA FUDA GUTTA SHUTTA BUTTA TASTE GOODA SHULDDA WULLDA POOPY
 — unknown

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-scott
 — unknown

this poem really rocs
 — unknown

FUCKIN BITCHES... U ALL SUC PUSSY AND DICK AND ALL THAT SHIT... U FUCKIN BASTARDS... GO FUCK UR MAMMA, DUMB ASS MOTHER FUCKIN BITCHES
 — unknown

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