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All Cried Out My Darling
ChristinaM

Laying on your bed, my throat swells and I can feel the lump grow.
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Hot tears burn my face as they trickle down. I inhale a shakey breath.
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Twenty minutes has gone by, as you slide in the keyboard.
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Have you noticed?
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Turning swiftly, 'What's wrong?'
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slithers from between your lips.
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All I'm thinking is, 'How can you not know?' I'm choking on my tears now.
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Spitting out words, my breath becomes harder to manage.
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So, I sit up slowly without looking at you. Breathing cautiously so I can stay alive.
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I'm stealing a glance whether you like it or not.
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After moments of silence, I break.
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I'm telling you all those things you hate to hear.
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Your eyes are so empty.
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As if you don't know what to do, or how to fix anything.
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I begin to notice your face, it's reddening.
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And look, your eyes are watering.
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A few teardrops fall, and silence beckons us yet again.
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We crumble beneath the weight.
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Sarcasm is just an added bonus, and it seeps out of my pores.
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I can see it in your face that you're angry.
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Guess what sweetie, I'm exhausted.
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Crying is hard work.
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I believe I'm done.
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My last night,
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One last kiss,
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A two person bed only half filled.
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9 Jun 05

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Good poem, but i think the title needs some work, It dosn't match as well as I'd like.
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