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larrylark
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Glissando swan,
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glimpsed on gleaming
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silver lake.
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Heart breaking
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distant misty ballerina
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glides on brittle glass;
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light gleams across
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still sheen.
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Mast of sailing ship
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slips past, clipping
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headland of papier
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maché mountain.
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Lit cigarette clouds up
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threatening weather.
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Black ash slashes
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grey smoke -
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a shroud, tarred, yellow.
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Volcanic eruption
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shudders the swan,
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rudderless ship
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falls off table top
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cliff, trodden underfoot,
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careless cigarette end
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drains the silver lake.
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Sun switched off.
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Silence reigns.
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Distant rhythmic
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rumble becomes
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an earthquake
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boring down on
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a bedroom shore.
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1 May 05 |
Rated 9.5 (9) by 4 users.
Active (4): 8, 9, 10, 10
Inactive (1): 8
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A little world in miniature; a metaphor for the big world and the way you sustain this all the way through is great - good move from the peace of the sibilant 's' to the disquieting 'k's and 'b's of the last two stanzas.
— unknown
Wonderful, vivid imagry. Gives me something to look up to.
— midare
I like this. The way you have this written is flawless. It flows, nicely. Good work.
— Hear
Dear Hear
Thanks,your comment is much appreciated
— larrylark
WOW!! amazing,........i like the way u use metaphors to represent what is goin on in the bedroom shore! quite amazing
— crismonblue
This is so good, can't believe it's been here for over a year and I missed it.
I find the sounds very soothing, although I would not try to read it aloud in front of anyone! Tongue twisting but very musical. The last line made me hurt suddenly.
— Isabelle5
Hi Isabelle
I hid it away cus i lost the original draft when the house burned down but i rebuilt it as a bungalow out of Lego bricks and reforged the poem and posted it especially for someone of taste and discernment to read.
Larry waiting game Lark
— larrylark
Dear crismonblue
Thanks for the positive response.
Larry in flames lark
— larrylark
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