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(FoTo) The Great American Dream
ShelbyS

"Viva La Revolucion!" is
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chanted in the air above their ranks.
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They're moving cosmos again
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with frightening ease despite
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an utter lack of precision.
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Bright white orbs hang
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mercilessly, eye line locked on a
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bright red calligraphy brush waiting for
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its prey to come undone so it could be
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sacrificed to change the world.
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She moves tranquilly, waiting for
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just the right moment; artist's soul meets
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paper and everything swerves in an
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awkward and distasteful fashion.
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White turns to black to avoid the
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coming red and all falls to silence;
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disheartening absence of a normally talkative
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group. (despite their lack of mouths, too.)
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And when all turns to stone and new skin is
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settled in, a new breed will exist under an
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awful translucent skyline.
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They'll remove themselves until the next new
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shade falls from the idiot box parked in front of
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them and into their static brainwaves, unknowing,
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unthinking, unyielding, and unable to see the
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coming oblivion.
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13 Mar 05

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glorious
 — onklcrispy

you don't need the link to the photo ... this work stands on its own ... indeed ... i'm not even going to look ... i'm just going to read this again .... (beautiful opening stanza! pulled me all the way through)
 — Bloodfetish

any other thoughts or paranormally conspiratic ideas?
 — unknown

thi si quite awesome
 — tragicbubble

BITCH
 — unknown

changed
 — ShelbyS

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