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Emishan
gnormal

breakfast in mittens
 1
at the bottom of a holy mountain
 2
closer to the monkeys now
 3
a decending climber told me how
 4
 
 
he used his walking stick
 5
to threaten a monkey in the path
 6
and scamper the sob
 7
demanding handouts
 8
"not from me!"
 9
 
 
"i raised the stick"
 10
the monkey stood
 11
"i shook the stick"
 12
the monkey stared
 13
"i swung the stick"
 14
the monkey caught the stick
 15
"and held it still!"
 16
 
 
"couldnt be..." i puffed
 17
wanting to believe
 18
i could arm-wrestle a beast
 19
a good stranger-
 20
story before me
 21
 
 
all the way to the clouds i climb
 22
the steps cut into Emishan
 23
looking monkeys in the eye
 24
none of them knows why
 25

http://employees.csbsju.edu/hjakubowski/Chinapict4/100_0971.jpg
though none appeared daring enough for hand to hand combat, i did see a monkey snatch the backpack off a danish girl, rip the zipper open with his teeth, and steal her chocolate and panties.

18 Feb 05

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thats not my photo.
 — gnormal

i like this ... while there are chuckles throughout, so too are the excellence of language, word choice and rhythm ... really, really love the flow, especially from lines 8 through 16
 — Bloodfetish

or is it?!
 — gnormal

good work, good mix of frivolous & serious.  I'm dying for a semicolon or two, though (lines 6 & 17).
Thanks,
 — mikkirat

~smiles~























-adorablelittlepenis-
 — unknown

chocolate panties? smiles.
 — kaleidazcope

gnormal!

just chuckles.
 — kaleidazcope

this is my favourite poem by you.
 — kaleidazcope

hehe
that's great...
monkeys 're th' best
i also like panties
rock steady
 — chuckles

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