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the bus conceit
Inuki

- an extended metaphor / poetic conceit

everyone pushes and struggles
 1
to break in
 2
but once they're on
 3
the aesthetes cramped and crowded
 4
just want to get off
 5
while the general public
 6
just want to get off, get off, get off.
 7
 
 
some sit luxuriously on the bus
 8
reading or writing
 9
while those who stand
 10
stand begging for a seat -
 11
there are no half-seated
 12
or half-standing people.
 13
 
 
the driver's motives
 14
are unlike the passenger's -
 15
but once they get on the bus
 16
they're stuck with him.
 17
 
 
i'm tired of the in-fighting
 18
and the hot sweaty bodies.
 19
i think i'll get off early
 20
before my stop.
 21

9 Feb 05

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You know how I feel about work like this...

-Dandy
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Heh, i like it, very well done, i think
 — katt

i like this. lines eighteen, nineteen, feels so real, like it came straight from the author's mouth. nice work.
 — listen

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