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Not so, damn us.
unknown

Lost in the circular logic of
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                                       crying shame
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Hot shivers,
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                  doubt that this will never be the same.
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                     The way your hair falls
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                           after a gust of wind.
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Or the crazy wildness, sinking depth,
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underneath
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                 the cherry red apples of heaven.
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                             Hey, I heard you whispering
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          (nymphs have fattened ears).
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Now, I never underestimated,
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I could have, all these years.
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For the lack of better judgement,
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or the blame of aching feet,
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                                          Love is worth
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                        the consequence
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                                          Your gaze is worth
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                        the meet.
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I should have turned a page
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    or two
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                                    but I left it up to the wind
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                                    the crazy sinking wildness
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the gust of the illogic grin.
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3 Nov 04

Rated 8 (7.8) by 4 users.
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wo!!! i read the fist few lines and went over to click on another poem, but something told me to finished it! i am so veru glad i did! it is amazing.  i love poems that rhyme but it isnt so obvious.  i like your spacing.  i woouldnt change a thing in this poem! perfect 10
 — meghanmidget

well! thank you very much.
 — unknown

Good spacing.  Hints to the erratic thoughts, the skip of our minds...

Worthy of a half smile.  I'm juiced
 — dionnefields

The spacing makes me want to throw up... but overall it's pretty damn good.
 — unknown

The spacing was a turn off at first, but now i find it interesting.
 — Skillmatic

I just love this for no particular reason, other than it's passionate, orginal, timeless and stirs me.

Thank you
 — smugzy

I never saw this before.  This is very well done, conveys a lot of different things in a short space.
 — Isabelle5

good format. i like the way this reads down the page, a tad wild but with good rhythm.
 — listen

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